Hurley Telemachus Revision (22)

After receiving helpful advice from Courtney, I got a good just as to what I needed to revise. The largest part I needed to work on was definitely my epic simile. After thinking about what could fit for my simile I added to my story and read it over to make sure it fit well in the sentence. I also added more details to my sentence relating to who, how, feeling etc... Reading out loud allowed me to noticed there were many more little mistakes I needed to fix that I did not pick up from just looking over my story.